A Sage’s Letter to a Friend

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Apr 092011
 
Don’t pray that your enemies live long…
You might not live to discover you were wrong! 

If you live a life full of dreams,
You just might be dreaming when opportunity beams.

Don’t ask to see death’s sting,
Seek the path of eternal’s King.

If you ask why it has to be you,
You’d age without a clue.

Don’t love with the whole of your heart,
Live love with every of your part.

If you fail to be the best,
Make sure you aren’t too far from the first.

Don’t ever underrate a woman’s power,
She isn’t always a flower.

And if experience is without rage,
Remember, there’d be no sage.

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  1. Avatar of xikay
    xikay @ says:
    March 16, 2011 at 12:12 pm

    @4ran6, this is a wow,i loved it , maybe more cos of the tightly knit rhymes…you pulled this off big time…

  2. Avatar of Raymond
    Raymond @ says:
    April 10, 2011 at 3:58 am

    In fact, I no know wetin I wan talk again. I loved every part of this!!!

  3. Avatar of Scopeman
    Scopeman @ says:
    April 10, 2011 at 1:57 pm

    I just love the first two lines, they really make so much sense, well done 4ran6!

  4. Avatar of posh
    posh @ says:
    April 10, 2011 at 2:18 pm

    love this to pieces.
    @4ran6..thanks for sharing,you just made my day!
    Welldone.

  5. Avatar of uchechukwu obiakor
    uchechukwu obiakor @ says:
    April 10, 2011 at 4:09 pm

    i don dey happy like a drunk wey sama ten bottles of kai kai.good poem@4ra6

  6. Avatar of Lawal Opeyemi Isaac
    Lawal Opeyemi Isaac @ says:
    April 10, 2011 at 10:31 pm

    If you ask why it has to be you,
    You’d age without a clue.

    Those are definitely my best lines 4ran6. You did good with this one.There’s something in it for everybody to take.

    Well done!!!

  7. Avatar of Lancaster
    Lancaster @ says:
    April 11, 2011 at 1:02 am

    Great piece. Good work with the rhymes.

  8. Avatar of xikay
    xikay @ says:
    April 11, 2011 at 9:34 am

    just strolling by…

  9. Avatar of xikay
    xikay @ says:
    April 11, 2011 at 10:46 am

    i have found love words cast like the Benin bronzes

  10. Avatar of Mercy Ilevbare
    Mercy Ilevbare @ says:
    April 12, 2011 at 3:44 am

    Absolutely love this….my fav part is
    “If you fail to be the best,
    Make sure you aren’t too far from the first”
    Well done!!

  11. Avatar of Adewale S.
    Adewale S. @ says:
    April 12, 2011 at 6:47 am

    The first couplet dragged me really in. I love it. Very very great poem.
    The only nits I see, IMHO- the slant: best/first.
    And the weak last couplet. I was expecting something better than the first. A punchline.

    But all in all, great!

    • Avatar of 4ran6
      4ran6 @ says:
      April 12, 2011 at 10:54 am

      Thanks, ur comment is really inspiring… Ur nit of best/first is noted, but d consonant cluster ‘st’ rhymes in both. I’d look for a way to throw in another couplet dat wld serve as d punchline, Great isn’t enough for me, wld try to go further. Thanks again, ur comment is really appreciated.

  12. Avatar of xikay
    xikay @ says:
    April 12, 2011 at 11:12 am

    @ADEWALE like i always say,…rhymes are of different kinds (check wikipedia) this couplet does rhyme for me

  13. Avatar of Meena-Adekoya
    Meena-Adekoya @ says:
    April 13, 2011 at 6:23 am

    nice rhymes…u pulled it off very well

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