i met another dude
tho he looked so much like mr fyne
i still wanted to know the real him
cos i was not fully recovered
from mr fyne
i call him Mr. six packs
cos he had 6 packs
and was very well built
when we first met
he said hi
and i mouthed bye
i think he though i said hi
so he continued talking
and since i already said bye
i gave him no response
he suddenly got anrgy
and started usin a lot of funny words
most of the words were swear language
so i decided to stop a motorcycle
headed to the Palace of true discovery
twas my inquisitive mind at work dis time
i wanted to see what was at the palace of true discovery
when we got there
the gatekeeper opened the gates of opportunity
and i walked doen the path of hidden treasures
the path was so rough
i really wanted to turn back
but i really wanted to see what was in the palace also
on my way to the palace
i met Mr. growing up
i choose to call him that
cos he really was taking baby steps
and since there was no ipod or mp3 in the world i found maself
i just felt i could take those baby steps wiv him
at least i get to have company
with time we got talking
and he told me alot bout his travails
while journeyin thru the land of fantasy
i became so free with him
and we talked bout a lot of things
he told me the story of a particular person
and i got so interested
he talked like the person was his close friend
so i asked him to give me more details
and wen he told me more
i fell in love wit the person
we both took more steps to know this person
and in this person i found what i was looking for
TRUE LOVE UNEXCHANGEABLE
with time we came closer to the palace of true discovery
and mr. growing up
told me how he felt bout me
sincerely at this point
i was already in love with Mr. growing up
so it didn’t take me before i told my new friend bout it
so my new friend gave me a go-ahead
and all i had to do was say yes
wen we got to the palace of true discovery
i met the king
and mr. growin up with me too
we became closer than ever and was almost inseparable
so the king invited us to a banquet at his table
i was to be dressed in royal attire
since some dignitaries would be present at the banquet
the seamstress came around to take ma measurement
and den she made a dress for me
i almost fainted when i saw the dress
it was green in colour
the kind of green some people call amber green
it had some jewels on it
besides it was a topaz necklace
and a beaded slippers to where on my foot
some pearls were also on the dressing table
for me to use
i dressed up
and then i stepped out
my new found love was swept in awe
when he saw me walk down the stairs
he took my hand and led me to the banquet hall
the king was pleased to see me
and when he saw me
he told my new love to sit down
and then he introduced my newly found love properly to me
he called him
the man that fears the king with his whole heart
and the one assigned to be ma second half from heaven
then he opened my eyes to see what my newly found love truly looked like
he wore a robe of love
a cap of dignity
a belt of care
and a footwear of honor
he was truly wat i heard searched for all these years
indeed ma jorney to this unknown world proofed fruitful
but then i was snappe back to reality
by my fone’s unceasing beeping
and really i wished my journey to the palace of true discovery happened again
but since then i had a focus in mind
of what my mr. Growing up looked like
i have not met him yet
but the person he introduced to me in the trance(or wateva)
has really been revealed to me in reality
and he says to me
that he makes all things beautiful in his time
Meen! This one na poetic journey o! I like the idea behind this, but presentation was below par. Watch out for your capitalisations, and the typos were a tad too much.
Well done!!!
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Lolz, how many kilometers u waka? Quite some length sha
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Above all, only a strong desire to write could string those lines. Well done!
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So many kilometers to somewhere, lolz
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The first part felt a bit supernatural, but this second part kinda veered off that direction. Still, not bad. However, I ditto Lawal regarding the presentation and capitalization.
?Work on this…
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@y’all- fenks, i think imma have to work on my using short forms erry now nd den. All corrections noted……..
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was just kidding… U did well. I’d like to see more of u soon
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I think you need to embrace some level of formality in your writing, so you don’t get used to short forms and abbreviations; besides, they didn’t really help your fine message, but rather took away from it.
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