Apr 102011
This day is done
The night is gone
Hope for a better day
Seems to be dwindling
In a corrupt nation
Birthright bargained by sweet killer
Attaching pile to the middlename of its citizens
Weakening the backbone of truth
Triumph illness empathise with dwellers
And promise salvation of bounty
Greediness and egoism
All minds possessed by these illness
Egoism succeed to rule love
Love of the people
Human right has turned to human hunt
Thus, crime guard this disease
Pruning the prurients
And preachers of truth
Great war should be fought
War of truth and freedom
And reign of altruism
Should be established
Thus, citizens diseases can be cured
Human right has turned to human hunt
Thus, crime guard this disease
Pruning the prurients
And preachers of truth
……great lines. That’s the truth, the basic truth. Thanks for sharing this. I like it.
Great war should be fought
War of truth and freedom….
I’m overfeeling this….
This is ‘heavy’ poem and I think it requires a lot of work to make it light and enjoyable!
The subject matter is over-flogged and it takes a great effort to craft something fresh around it.
Overall, the poem has promise and I think you can unbundle it further!
@kabura, you are not wrong but that does not take away from the heavy truth of the poem…
The solution is to enforce righteousness upon the land… Tough but highly necessary.
They have talked it finish….Nice and heavy….
They didn’t finish it, we can finish it by starting the heavy wars from around us, not wars of arms fighting, but alms giving in all ramification!