I see walking men in this little Masterpiece
Men moving in drizzling figures of Aliens
Robotic creatures that beats my imagination
All in this Photograph
I hear footsteps
Footsteps of men matching on waters
I never knew the sound of waters to be that loud!
Louder than empty barrels
I see them rehearsing……
Rehearsing songs of war, songs of liberation
All in this photograph
What are they singing?
O! They are going to war……!
They are pulling down the strong-holds
They are advocating for change
Wait a minute…….Are they Africans?
It seems they are calling for a rebirth
It seems they are tired of exploitation
O! They are youths
I hear their provoking utterances
All in this photograph
Wait! Their leader wants to speak
What’s he saying?
O! did he say genocide….?
Genocide for evil leaders?
No….Not at all
I never observed the photograph to be….
of an ancestral nature
It has gone through hands of many generations
Hands that have failed to trace the history of
Its source
A passing generation without a vision.
Look! Where is the leader going?
He is taking the mantle…..
Their voice must be heard
The voice of an African Child
O! They’ve pulled down the strong man
Perhaps…It wouldn’t have lasted this long
If one of our Fathers said all I now see
They only paid tributes in memory of the photographer
They praised his masterpiece
And ignored his call
Call for redemption, Call for change
All in this photograph….
Thought provoking piece, you got here Bruh. I enjoyed reading this, especially the ending…..Good job
@adesoji, you did a great job here capturing the wind of political change, well done
check this line:
Footsteps of men matching [MARCHING] on waters
I echo Lancaster and xikay that this is a great effort that captures the current situation in our country. I like the rallying call therein as well, and the prophetic optimism. This poem can be powerfully performed!
Technically, you might want to look again at the word ‘drizzling’ in the second line of the first stanza. Maybe you meant to write ‘dizzying?’ If so, it works well! Or you may find another word that will lift that line.
You also have some capitalisation that you didn’t follow through the poem. You may want to look at those as well.
Well done!
I like how this poem relates to the predicament of the nation at the moment; the youths are ‘marching’ indeed, and victory is near.
A big thank you to all for you corrections.am glad not because my work receives compliment but for the fact that the message I pass across is been understood I see change coming soon. By the story continues watch out for THE PHOTOGRAPH 2
The change cometh….