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Best Laid Plans.

Sasha in her red sequin dress, I in my customized Toms, raced down third mainland bridge in my black brand-new BMW to our hotel room near our school. I never […]

Lol, this is fun. Ever since I heard of this I have been thinking of limericks. But some of you have some really, really long sentences/paragraphs. We should call the Guinness book of word records…

I would like to thank @admin for speedily reviewing my story.
Though I did post it via mobile phone, I hoped to proof read within the week long wait. I guess I shouldn’t rely on that anymore and only publish […]

Thanks IBKinx. Noted

I had a look again and you’re quite right. I just changed direction expecting the reader to follow. I should have led a little more.
Point taken. Transitions.
Thanks.

Thank you sir. So what score out of ten do I get 4 improvement as per directions.
I am also implementing guidelines from Lecture notes I downloaded online and I’d like to think I follow instructions well.

Thanks Tola. Points greatly appreciated.
Minor error with the Chibuzor and Chizogu mixup. I edited one to the other and one stray ‘chibuzor’ escaped me.
Thanks again.

Thank you Eletrika.

Why thank you. that’s part of my goal and am glad u saw it.
Worshippers… Yes.

I know the nigerian societal perception (misperception) on marriage is the theme but I’d like to point out that we are being reminded on every other paragraph of the topic. Just a little note for the eventual compilation. Plus family and friends can talk about it all the time but I doubt strangers like the [...]

Dusting my pencil.

Fantastic! Chick Lit Romance is back on NS! Yay!

Very nice so far. But it is a bit disjointed. And in the paragragh that she is in third year i got lost. I thought she had gone back to talking about Debola meanwhile it was Dave. The Brackets indicated you were moving on to another topic not related to Dave.

‘They had actually let her alone since, while still riled from the encounter with the annoying, if attractive man on the hills of Erin Ijesha, she had retorted one of the women with a barb of her own.’ I think i could make head of this but not tails… maybe if this were 2 distinct [...]

Yea am so hating Mr. Fine-guy-Babs. Its going to be interesting seeing how they end up together. Just like the way you built up the relationship in your first novel ‘A Heart to Mend’ or even better.

She had to ‘device’ a way to prevent them from seeing again. I think you meant ‘devise’.

Ditto some comments especially Lawal’s. Not much going on in this part. I guess its just her reaction to the guy thats relevant. And i think there was a bit of repitition when she said she would make her family’s day by taking Babs home. She thought the same thing about Paul. Its a bit [...]

This is just flowing along. I like the MC she’s totally embraced singledom and can read guys. I noticed the repeated paragraph as well as a sentence that’s supposed to be a statement and not a question. “Folarin, I hope there are more steps up there?” And I don’t think its Folarin, am not down [...]

I concur with all the comments. Very good descriptive power. Hanging out can be bad. But one thing was nagging me… what would he swear on if he were a pagan?

Sounds like torture Lol….

That’s Debonair Bookstore.

No doubt this is good. A mirror image of society as it is now. Funny thing is I read some articles on some blogs and ‘BellaNaija’ on this same issue. Single ladies are getting fed up. Na by force?

So this is the ‘awwwwww’ part of the story. I was so eager to see what the-freaking-hell she was up to and i kinda got let down by the “You are going to listen to me, because if you don’t, the leader of Slash and Burn is going to find out how one of its [...]

Even without the romance your MC is spectacular, though in real life i would be scared of her. Look at those smart replies! She’s so cool!

I really like this. You are still one my best writers on NS. Where is your novel? I would gladly pay full price. I really hope your MC has repented. As for the distracted banker, I would have thought it was problems @ work. Maybe a promotion he had been hoping for was given to [...]

Admin should open a new category for Erotic fiction. I don’t see romance here.

This is a brave effort considering how sensitive this area is. Its not easy to describe if its never being experienced. The little hidden note @ the end threw off the reality of this for me. Nice try though.