@seun-odukoya, thanks for reading and enjoying.

High praise. Glad you enjoyed

Thanks, glad you appreciate.

Thanks so much for your comments

Thanks @Africanrose

@Lade, wish I had a prize for guessing the end. I actually did not know how it will end till I got there, I am glad you enjoyed reading.

Thanks for stopping by.

Thanks for enjoying.

Calls to mind the tale of the ‘Good Samaritan’
Good one.

Hmmm…A few typos, minor grammar errors and I feel the narration should have had a bit more depth. It fell a bit flat, leaving me thinking “and the point is?” yet this could have been a good story many of our female folk could relate to. Work on it!

We want change but individually we lack moral fibre and integrity. We need to look at the man in the mirror.
Why the caps? Who are you shouting at? The message will still be heard loud and clear without raising your voice!
Arise O Compatriots!

Take for example this sentence: …and her warmth-yielding taps lies traps no greedy eyes can see Should be lie/lay instead of lies the beckon of her eyes- should perhaps be the beckoning of… from whence calls of pleasure flies-should be fly but can be excused for poetic rhyming and it pleasures so awesome- should be [...]

This story has great potential but some how seems not fully thought through.18year old boy? So desperate to get to America you and your dad sit back and let your mum be gang-raped? Over what period of time? And the Indian girl did not panic that you would rape her? What sort of voyage is [...]

Is this about heaven or about success? Good job

Nice structure and lyrical sequencing , but the grammar needs finetuning.

A beg o @xikay! no be me be sire(I am just as scrapy as everyone here also trying to get published- i no be oga) however, the feeling is mutual…(lol)

@xikay, Thanks again. I take a bow! You are one of those whose analysis and corrections help improve our work. Please remain undaunted (kudos). I now nominate you into the hallowed chambers of NS Elderstatesman (lol).

@Raymonnd (hehehe) you really catch my drift. Many thanks for stopping by and commenting. Please join our group NS Writers for Naija`s Image.

@King Koboko, you will do well to listen to @Raymond I could not have said it better.

Thanks for your nod, glad you like…