Beautiful, as always.

A raunchy tale, but one with a moral lesson. In Because of Me, Ezeama Chijioke Desmond offers us a yarn woven around Fred and his younger brother, Desmond. Both brothers learnt a lesson, the hard way: you never […]

Nicely written, and true.

“I’m not the only one,” a typical woman, finely moulded into shape by the society, would say; “others have endured, I will too.” Truly, no one wants to be different, especially, when […]

Edit more, and then, a little more-and try to throw away some of the details.

Beautiful. Some sentences were hard to read-maybe, its just me; maybe, some punctuations did not work that well. But, it was beautiful.

A beautiful piece must be appreciated. Well done, Josh.

Quite funny.

I’m not a pessimist, but, considering the dude’s record, I’m sure Josh’s shoes won’t last long. Poor Sarah.

Another beautiful piece from Folakemi Emem-Akpan.

Nice story.

* It seems while typing or editing, you changed some sentences, but forgot to remove a word or two that were no longer needed e.g “. . . then she would laugh like some mischievous evil queen, as she […]

Is this prose or poetry?

I only read the first stanza-paragraph?

Well written. And I learnt some new words-big words.

* I guess she took a peek through the keyhole, not the door knob.

The plight of the childless woman!

The end came too sudden. Also, the last paragraph contained two different ideas-Tunde’s provocation and the final greeting to the recipient’s family. I don’t think that it is […]

Nice message.

* upon - up on ( . . . don’t give upon it)
* has, her - had, he (In his mind, he has tried all her could . . . )
* unbelief - disbelief (The king smiled and watched in unbelief)
* wouldn’t - […]

Its been a while, bro.

Nice one.

Nice flow.

I also share same view as @praize-the quotation mark especially.

Nice.

* i’m - I’m
* Try to keep the tense constant e.g she quickly ‘shove’ the shock aside. I guess it ought to be ‘shoved’.

Sincerely, I skipped a greater part of the piece. And I have a question to ask-a further question, maybe: is this a poem? If its not, then, why is the piece bereft of almost all appropriate punctuation marks?

@ufuomaotebele…..
I’m sure you won’t be disappointed.

Thanks for the comment.

A write that forcefully pulls you in, dragging you through a fine maze of words, unto a beautiful finish. In ‘LOST YEARS’, you will find suspense, love-and a lot more.

I’ve read stories that had that ‘fast-forward’ touch, but, truly, none can compete with what you just did. The pace was just so fast!